What I Said:

I’d like to add my uncle on WeChat for asking help to try to get some business opportunities. But he added me before I doing it this morning. Maybe cause my sister, his daughter, has talked with him. I talked with him about my confusion and business requirements, told him that I hope he can extend connection with some companies. On top of that, I realized that I should prepare some real scenarios demo for these companies or industries. Because it’s too difficult to explain the values of my business , it’s too hard to explain it if only using text or voice conversation. I need to show them in their workflows using their terms. So I left in a lot of effort to prepare it for a whole day. Hope I can get some progress after in person communication with a company at tomorrow.

ChatGPT’s Revision:

I wanted to add my uncle on WeChat to ask for help with business opportunities, but he added me first this morning—probably because my sister, his daughter, had already talked to him. I shared my confusion and business needs with him and told him I hoped he could help connect me with some companies. I also realized I need to prepare real scenario demos for these companies or industries. It’s too hard to explain the value of my business through text or voice alone. I need to show them in their workflows and using their terms. I spent the whole day working on this. Hopefully, tomorrow’s in-person meeting with a company will bring some progress.

Fixes and Explanations:

  • “I’d like to add my uncle on WeChat for asking help to try to get some business opportunities” → “I wanted to add my uncle on WeChat to ask for help with business opportunities”

    Simplified phrasing and adjusted verb tense to match the timeline.

  • “But he added me before I doing it this morning” → “but he added me first this morning”

    Corrected grammar (“before I doing” → “before I could do”) and streamlined the sentence.

  • “Maybe cause my sister, his daughter, has talked with him” → “probably because my sister, his daughter, had already talked to him”

    “Probably because” is smoother than “maybe cause,” and past perfect (“had talked”) fits the timeline.

  • “I talked with him about my confusion and business requirements, told him that I hope he can extend connection with some companies” → “I shared my confusion and business needs with him and told him I hoped he could help connect me with some companies”

    Rephrased for clarity and fluency.

  • “I realized that I should prepare some real scenarios demo for these companies or industries” → “I also realized I need to prepare real scenario demos for these companies or industries”

    Adjusted “should prepare” to “need to prepare” and corrected “scenarios demo” to “scenario demos.”

  • “Because it’s too difficult to explain the values of my business , it’s too hard to explain it if only using text or voice conversation” → “It’s too hard to explain the value of my business through text or voice alone”

    Combined repetitive phrases for conciseness.

  • “I need to show them in their workflows using their terms”

    Kept as is. It’s clear and logical.

  • “So I left in a lot of effort to prepare it for a whole day” → “I spent the whole day working on this”

    Simplified phrasing for fluency.

  • “Hope I can get some progress after in person communication with a company at tomorrow” → “Hopefully, tomorrow’s in-person meeting with a company will bring some progress”

    Smoothed phrasing and corrected “at tomorrow” to “tomorrow.”