Exploring Digitalization in Manuafacturing: A Promising Start
What I Said:
I sent English material to some friends who titled CXO in their companies yesterday. And today, I contacted a friend who I talked about digitalization project with. The company is in manufacture industry, so DevOps module might not be match with them, IPD module would be better. But as I know this company procedures are not complex, so I would deep dive into their current business procedures, a friend who works on manufacture industries for a long time, suggesting me to start from the task of digitalization for issue check tickets. I agreed that, it might be a great entry point.
ChatGPT’s Revision:
Yesterday, I sent the English materials to some friends who are CXOs at their companies. Today, I followed up with a friend I had discussed a digitalization project with. The company is in the manufacturing industry, so a DevOps module might not be the best fit. An IPD module would work better. However, since their procedures aren’t very complex, I plan to dive deeper into their current business workflows. A friend with years of experience in manufacturing suggested starting with digitalizing their issue check tickets. I agreed—it might be a great entry point!
Fixes and Explanations:
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“I sent English material to some friends who titled CXO in their companies yesterday” → “Yesterday, I sent the English materials to some friends who are CXOs at their companies”
Rephrased “titled CXO” to “are CXOs” for smoother phrasing and added “the” for grammatical accuracy.
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“And today, I contacted a friend who I talked about digitalization project with” → “Today, I followed up with a friend I had discussed a digitalization project with”
“Followed up” is more concise, and “had discussed” ensures correct past tense.
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“so DevOps module might not be match with them” → “so a DevOps module might not be the best fit”
Simplified for natural phrasing.
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“IPD module would be better”
Kept as is; it’s clear and concise.
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“as I know this company procedures are not complex” → “since their procedures aren’t very complex”
Smoothed the phrasing for conversational tone.
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“a friend who works on manufacture industries for a long time, suggesting me to start from the task of digitalization for issue check tickets” → “A friend with years of experience in manufacturing suggested starting with digitalizing their issue check tickets”
Simplified for better readability and corrected tense.
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“I agreed that, it might be a great entry point” → “I agreed—it might be a great entry point!”
Added a dash for emphasis and a positive note.