What I Said:

I’ve gotta take Candy to see the doctor, who is working on a hospital in Shanghai. We saw him before, and we got that he works in another hospital in our city every weekend. So we planned to see him today and asked my parents to help us to take William to his storytelling lesson. But William had been sick last night, we had to cancel his today’s lesson and asked my parents to take William to see a doctor, since he cough heavy. We went back home evening, when Candy felt better after treat, even though we hadn’t finish the procedure, but we had to went home as soon as possible. William felt better after taking medicine.

ChatGPT’s Revision:

I had to take Candy to see the doctor at a hospital in Shanghai. We’ve seen him before and learned that he also works at another hospital in our city on weekends. So we planned to visit him today and asked my parents to take William to his storytelling lesson. But William got sick last night and was coughing heavily, so we had to cancel his lesson and ask my parents to take him to see a doctor instead. We got back home in the evening after Candy started feeling better following her treatment. Even though we hadn’t finished the procedures at the hospital, we had to leave as soon as possible. William also felt better after taking his medicine.

Fixes and Explanations:

  • “I’ve gotta take Candy to see the doctor, who is working on a hospital in Shanghai” → “I had to take Candy to see the doctor at a hospital in Shanghai”

    “I’ve gotta” is replaced with “I had to” for past tense. “At a hospital” is more natural than “on a hospital.”

  • “We saw him before, and we got that he works in another hospital in our city every weekend” → “We’ve seen him before and learned that he also works at another hospital in our city on weekends”

    “Learned that” is clearer than “we got that,” and “on weekends” is smoother than “every weekend.”

  • “So we planned to see him today and asked my parents to help us to take William to his storytelling lesson” → “So we planned to visit him today and asked my parents to take William to his storytelling lesson”

    Simplified and smoothed the phrasing. Removed “to help us to take,” as it’s redundant.

  • “But William had been sick last night, we had to cancel his today’s lesson” → “But William got sick last night and was coughing heavily, so we had to cancel his lesson”

    “Got sick last night” is simpler than “had been sick last night.” Adjusted for clarity and added “was coughing heavily.”

  • “and asked my parents to take William to see a doctor, since he cough heavy” → “and ask my parents to take him to see a doctor instead, since he was coughing heavily”

    Rephrased for smoother flow and corrected “he cough heavy” to “he was coughing heavily.”

  • “We went back home evening, when Candy felt better after treat, even though we hadn’t finish the procedure” → “We got back home in the evening after Candy started feeling better following her treatment. Even though we hadn’t finished the procedures”

    Rephrased for grammar and clarity. “Following her treatment” replaces “after treat.”

  • “but we had to went home as soon as possible” → “but we had to leave as soon as possible”

    Corrected “went home” to “leave” for proper tense and smoother phrasing.

  • “William felt better after taking medicine” → “William also felt better after taking his medicine”

    Added “also” for smoother transition and clarified “his medicine.”