What I Said:

It wasn’t a perfect day to out. But since my family members have been sicking in two weeks, we haven’t outing until today, even the weather wasn’t good. It can’t stop our steps to hug the nature. We walked on the grass. That’s a huge field in a park. We took many photos to keep the beautiful moments. We walked a line near the lake - TaiLake, the biggest lake in our city. Finally there are more than 10 thousands steps recorded on my phone.

ChatGPT’s Revision:

It wasn’t a perfect day to go out, but since my family has been sick for two weeks, we hadn’t gone out until today—even though the weather wasn’t great. It couldn’t stop us from embracing nature. We walked on the grass in a huge park and took lots of photos to capture the beautiful moments. We also strolled along Tai Lake, the largest lake in our city. By the end of the day, my phone recorded over 10,000 steps!

Fixes and Explanations:

  • “It wasn’t a perfect day to out” → “It wasn’t a perfect day to go out”

    “To out” is incorrect; “to go out” is the proper phrasing.

  • “But since my family members have been sicking in two weeks” → “But since my family has been sick for two weeks”

    “Sicking” isn’t correct; use “has been sick.” Also, “for two weeks” is the correct expression for duration.

  • “we haven’t outing until today” → “we hadn’t gone out until today”

    “Haven’t outing” is incorrect; “hadn’t gone out” works better in past perfect tense.

  • “even the weather wasn’t good” → “even though the weather wasn’t great”

    “Even though” is more natural, and “wasn’t great” softens the tone for conversational English.

  • “It can’t stop our steps to hug the nature” → “It couldn’t stop us from embracing nature”

    “Hug the nature” is awkward; “embracing nature” is more idiomatic.

  • “We walked on the grass. That’s a huge field in a park.” → “We walked on the grass in a huge park.”

    Combined sentences for better flow.

  • “We took many photos to keep the beautiful moments” → “We took lots of photos to capture the beautiful moments”

    “Capture” fits better than “keep,” and “lots of” is more conversational than “many.”

  • “We walked a line near the lake - TaiLake, the biggest lake in our city” → “We also strolled along Tai Lake, the largest lake in our city”

    “Strolled along” is a smoother phrase for walking near a lake. Added proper spacing to “Tai Lake.”

  • “Finally there are more than 10 thousands steps recorded on my phone” → “By the end of the day, my phone recorded over 10,000 steps!”

    Simplified phrasing and corrected “10 thousands” to “10,000.” Added enthusiasm with an exclamation mark.