Reading Bible Verses to William for English Exposure
What I Said:
William is better today, but still has been coughing sometimes. I didn’t do anything except playing with him a whole day. I read some verses of the Bible to William before he is sleeping in the evening. Absolutely he didn’t know what I’m saying. I just wanted to give him a condition about English.
ChatGPT’s Revision:
William is feeling better today, but he’s still coughing sometimes. I didn’t do much today except play with him all day. In the evening, before he went to sleep, I read some Bible verses to him. Of course, he didn’t understand what I was saying, but I just wanted to expose him to English.
Fixes and Explanations:
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“William is better today” → “William is feeling better today”
“Feeling better” is more natural when describing someone’s health improving.
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“but still has been coughing sometimes” → “but he’s still coughing sometimes”
Rephrased for smoother flow and to use the present continuous tense, which is more appropriate for ongoing symptoms.
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“I didn’t do anything except playing with him a whole day.” → “I didn’t do much today except play with him all day.”
“I didn’t do much” sounds more natural than “anything.” “All day” is more concise than “a whole day.”
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“I read some verses of the Bible to William before he is sleeping in the evening.” → “In the evening, before he went to sleep, I read some Bible verses to him.”
“Went to sleep” is the correct past tense, and “before he is sleeping” doesn’t match the past tense of the rest of the sentence.
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“Absolutely he didn’t know what I’m saying.” → “Of course, he didn’t understand what I was saying.”
“Of course” is a more natural way to express that something is expected. “Didn’t understand” is a better fit for this context, as it conveys meaning more clearly than “didn’t know.”
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“I just wanted to give him a condition about English.” → “I just wanted to expose him to English.”
“Expose him to English” sounds more natural and accurate. “Give him a condition” isn’t quite the right expression here.