What I Said:

William didn’t go to school today because he has been sick. I took him to the doctor and got the health report after blood check. Night he played the game with his mom and he always said a word — KOROMI. We didn’t know what does mean until he showed us a hello Kitty badge. That’s very interesting. He told us that a classmate told him it is called KOROMI.

ChatGPT’s Revision:

William didn’t go to school today because he’s been sick. I took him to the doctor, and we got a health report after a blood test. In the evening, he played a game with his mom and kept saying one word — KOROMI. We didn’t know what it meant until he showed us a Hello Kitty badge. It was so funny! He told us a classmate said it’s called KOROMI.

Fixes and Explanations:

  • “has been sick” → “he’s been sick”

    Contracted “he has” to “he’s” for a conversational tone.

  • “and got the health report after blood check” → “and we got a health report after a blood test”

    “Blood test” is the correct term, and adding “we” makes the sentence smoother.

  • “Night he played the game with his mom” → “In the evening, he played a game with his mom”

    “In the evening” is more natural than “Night.” Also, adjusted “the game” to “a game” for better flow.

  • “he always said a word — KOROMI” → “he kept saying one word—KOROMI”

    “Kept saying” is more natural for repeated actions in this context.

  • “We didn’t know what does mean” → “We didn’t know what it meant”

    Corrected grammar for clarity and fluency.

  • “until he showed us a hello Kitty badge” → “until he showed us a Hello Kitty badge”

    Capitalized “Hello Kitty” as it’s a proper noun.

  • “That’s very interesting” → “It was so funny!”

    “It was so funny!” sounds more engaging and conversational.

  • “He told us that a classmate told him it is called KOROMI” → “He told us a classmate said it’s called KOROMI”

    Simplified for better readability and flow.