What I Said:

I have finished the draft of my sharing about Data Management using JSM tools. It is a 30-pages slide made by Canva. There still have 2 things waiting for me. One is record 3 videos of tools demo. They will be added into the sharing. Another action item is that generate scripts using ChatGPT. It can help me to handle the whole presentation. The event maybe in 21 Dec, before Christmas. It must be my last presentation this year.

ChatGPT’s Revision:

I’ve finished the draft for my sharing session on Data Management using JSM tools. It’s a 30-page slide deck made with Canva. I still have two tasks left: recording three tool demo videos to include in the session and generating scripts with ChatGPT to guide the entire presentation. The event might be on December 21, right before Christmas. This will probably be my last presentation of the year.

Fixes and Explanations:

  • “I have finished the draft of my sharing about Data Management using JSM tools” → “I’ve finished the draft for my sharing session on Data Management using JSM tools”

    Rephrased for a smoother flow and added “session” for clarity.

  • “It is a 30-pages slide made by Canva” → “It’s a 30-page slide deck made with Canva”

    Corrected “30-pages” to “30-page” and added “slide deck” for a more professional term.

  • “There still have 2 things waiting for me” → “I still have two tasks left”

    Simplified phrasing and replaced “2” with “two” for consistency in formal writing.

  • “One is record 3 videos of tools demo” → “recording three tool demo videos”

    Corrected grammar and rephrased for better clarity.

  • “They will be added into the sharing” → “to include in the session”

    Rephrased for a natural tone and alignment with the earlier “sharing session.”

  • “Another action item is that generate scripts using ChatGPT” → “and generating scripts with ChatGPT”

    Made the sentence smoother and more connected with the first task.

  • “It can help me to handle the whole presentation” → “to guide the entire presentation”

    “Guide” feels more precise and professional than “handle.”

  • “The event maybe in 21 Dec, before Christmas” → “The event might be on December 21, right before Christmas”

    Adjusted “maybe” to “might be” for correctness and added “right before Christmas” for emphasis.

  • “It must be my last presentation this year” → “This will probably be my last presentation of the year”

    “Probably” is a better fit here for expressing uncertainty.