Working on an Insurance Opportunity
What I Said:
These days, my wife is going for a project which is an insurance case of a company policy. A friend is working in this company, we know her over about six or seven years. She agreed with our professional insurance skills and always try to forward business to us. Unfortunately, no contract until today. This time still isn’t a great opportunity, but the only thing we can do is trying.
ChatGPT’s Revision:
My wife has been working on a project recently—it’s an insurance case for a company policy. A friend who works at this company has known us for about six or seven years. She trusts our professional insurance skills and always tries to refer business to us. Unfortunately, we haven’t secured a contract yet. This time still doesn’t seem like a great opportunity, but all we can do is keep trying.
Fixes and Explanations:
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“my wife is going for a project” → “My wife has been working on a project”
“Going for” is unclear; “working on” is more appropriate here.
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“which is an insurance case of a company policy” → “it’s an insurance case for a company policy”
“For a company policy” is more natural than “of a company policy.”
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“A friend is working in this company” → “A friend who works at this company”
“Who works at” clarifies the connection between the friend and the company.
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“we know her over about six or seven years” → “has known us for about six or seven years”
Rephrased for grammatical correctness and smoother flow.
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“She agreed with our professional insurance skills and always try to forward business to us” → “She trusts our professional insurance skills and always tries to refer business to us”
“Trusts” is more appropriate, and “tries to refer business” is a smoother expression.
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“Unfortunately, no contract until today” → “Unfortunately, we haven’t secured a contract yet”
“Haven’t secured a contract yet” sounds more professional.
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“This time still isn’t a great opportunity, but the only thing we can do is trying” → “This time still doesn’t seem like a great opportunity, but all we can do is keep trying”
“Doesn’t seem like” is more conversational, and “keep trying” is more natural than “trying.”